It’s very cold. Yesterday, it was snow day. It was covered with snow yesterday. I think it was long time no see.
When I got up, I opened the curtain. I didn’t think it is snow. When I notice snow, I was very happy, because snow is rare in my hometown and Kyusyu. A lot of places were covered with snow. It was so beautiful.
I took some pictures at school. A few people made snowman. It looks so cute, and I felt fantastic. This is my friend’s Shiori. She and I hang out with snow a little time. The snow was so cool, however, it was very soft. If I had long time, I hang out with snow more time. I wanted to make a big snowman.
I had never play sky. I want to try it. If I have a chance, I try it least one in my life. If you can play sky, please tell me how to do it. I am looking forward to try sky. (170 words)
Proto Portfolios
フォロワー
My Proto-Portfolios
自己紹介
- yumi
- I like English. I started to learn English for ten years ago. But I can't speak English very well. I want to speak it very well. I'm interesting abroad. I want to trip a lot of places.
1/14/2010
Snowman!! and Shiori!!
1/13/2010
Shimonoseki
December 23, I went to Shimonoseki with my family and my grand father. I wanted to go there before, it was first time for me to go there. We went there by car, through expressway. It is very cheaper than any other transport. Expressway’s fee is only 1000yen one way by use ETC. So, my mother set it to go there.
We heard that Karato Ichiba, Shimonoseki, is very nice place by my uncle, so we decided to go there. It took about two hours and half hour. I felt near place from Kumamoto.
At there, we ate a lot of foods. For example, I ate sliced raw globefish, Miso soup of crab, rice porridge of globefish, and so on. These are delicious for me. Especially, I have thought to eat sliced raw globefish, so my dream came true. It was very good taste, then the sushi of globefish is so delicious too. I had never forgot that taste. After we ate lunch, we bought some gift for my grand mother and cousin’s family.
After that, we came back home. But, on the way, we went to Costoco. At that shop, we bought some goods. For example, my mother bought some commodity, and I bought some snacks, which came from overseas. I recommend Lays Potato chips. I ate it when I went to America, after that I like it very much. If you have a chance to go America or Costoco, please give me!! Haha!! (247 words)
1/12/2010
Coming of Age Day
I got up early the day morning, and I went to beauty salon to make up and dressing Kimono. It was second time for me to wear long-sleeves kimono. First was taking of pictures, and second was the ceremony’s day. However, I changed hair style. It makes change of image.
I was a member of the ceremony’s staff. So I had to go hall where the ceremony held. So I went to the hall about ten o’clock. To wear long-sleeves kimono is very hard for me because a lot of string bind the girl.
This is the picture of ceremony. My classmates are 77people. I think that the number is so few. However, I like this member. Our ceremony was finished homey mood. After that, at there, we held buffet party. Then we watched slide show. It made the ceremony’s stuff. We enjoyed watching the show. It makes us good old. Then we talked each other’s days. I was very glad to see a lot of friends long time no see. I think that the day was Memorial Day for me. (267 words)
1/11/2010
BR2-15 : Food from the World
BR 2-14 : GOVERNMENT IN AUSTRALIA
1/06/2010
Portfolios for Writting IV, Setion 1A
0.0. OVERVIEW
Reviews, Posts, Words, and More
1.0. ESSAYS
1.1. Showcase | Short titles with links to blog posts | Dates yyyy.mm.dd | ¶ | W | C | L | P | M |
2-01a (2009.10.07) | Partial | 2009.10.07 | 6 | 308 | 9 | 0 | 0 | 0 |
2-01b (2009.10.21) | Places I like | 2009.10.21 | 6 | 364 | 0 | 0 | 0 | 0 |
2-02b (2009.11.18) | Most cute bears | 2009.11.11 | 7 | 406 | 0 | 3 | 0 | 0 |
2-03a (2009.12.02) | Most important thing | 2009.11.28 | 7 | 701 | 15 | 0 | 0 | 0 |
2-03b (2009.12.18/22) | Most important things | 2009.12.16 | 9 | 929 | 1 | 0 | 0 | 0 |
Totals | --- | --- | 40 | 3085 | 32 | 6 | 1 | 0 |
Key:
1.2. Most Improved Essay
Selection and Assessment: Which of the three essays that you've written and revised this semester shows the most improvement? What did you do to improve it? Remember that complete answers are better than short answers, focus on your writing (accuracy, appropriacy, content and organization, rather than graphics or other media), and explain at least two major improvements.[Most important things]
- This essay is the most improvement than any other essays. For example this essay's structure is better than before essay. Then this essay has a few point of view, "I " and "we". So, I think that this essay is easy to read.
- This essay divide each gradually level. So, I felt current of time.
- I found that I didn't distinguish the words whether singular or plural clearly. So I improved those words.
2.0. COMMENTS
Showcase | Short titles of posts with links | Dates of comments yyyy.mm.dd | Numbers of words in comments | Qualities of comments** |
2.1. Your first comment on your instructor's blog* | Social Media and Social Networking Explained | 2009.10.14 | 17 | Impression |
2.2. Your best comment on a classmate's blog* | Language Learning stories | 2009.12.09 | 39 | Question Opinion |
2.3. Best comment by a classmate on your blog* | Most important thing | 2009.12.09 | 34 | improvement |
2.4. Most comments on: | Short titles of posts with link | Dates of posts yyyy.mm.dd | Total number of words in comments | Qualities of comments** |
2.4.1. Any one of your essays* | Most important thing | 2009.11.28 | 325 | improvements, good points |
2.4.1.1. When did you respond to those comments? | --- | 2009.12.16 | --- | --- |
2.4.1.2. How did you respond to those comments? | --- | --- | 929 | I post on the blog |
2.4.2. Any of your other posts* | 2009.10.14 | 145 | questions | |
2.4.2.1. When did you respond to those comments? | --- | 2009.10.14 | --- | --- |
2.4.2.2. How did you respond to those comments? | --- | --- | 60 | on the comment |
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* Current semester comments on essays and other posts
** Please list the most important qualities of comments on each type of blog post. That is, explain briefly what makes comments good.
2.5. Recent comments display
Does your blog display recent comments from blog visitors in a prominent location, for example, in a sidebar, header, or footer widget? Where, or why not? Please explain.- ... I located recent comments in a footer, because my blog's design can not locate in a sidebar, header. So, I located it in a footer.
2.6. Additional reflections on comments
- Through get some comments, I can get some opinion from reader. It is very benefit for me to study English, because reader tell me about some my mistakes.
- Through get some comments, I can know about other opinion which i don't have. Then I think that my view spread.
3.0. BOOK REVIEWS
3.1. Showcase | Short titles with links | Dates: yyyy.mm.dd | Words | Comments |
Example: | 2007.05.16 | 39 | 1 | |
BR 2-01 | 2009.08.14 | 236 | 0 | |
BR 2-02 | 2009.08.17 | 230 | 0 | |
BR 2-03 | 2009.08.20 | 189 | 0 | |
BR 2-04 | 2009.08.22 | 194 | 0 | |
BR 2-05 | 2009.09.21 | 120 | 0 | |
BR 2-06 | 2009.10.07 | 46 | 0 | |
BR 2-07 | 2009.10.14 | 201 | 0 | |
BR 2-08 | 2009.10.26 | 102 | 0 | |
BR 2-09 | 2009.10.30 | 148 | 1 | |
BR 2-10 | 2009.11.04 | 103 | 0 | |
BR 2-11 | 2009.11.10 | 133 | 0 | |
BR 2-12 | 2009.11.17 | 195 | 0 | |
BR 2-13 | 2009.11.24 | 198 | 0 | |
BR 2-14 | 2010.01.11 | 112 | 0 | |
BR 2-15 | 2010.01.11 | 87 | 0 | |
BR 2-16 | ||||
BR 2-17 | ||||
BR 2-18 | ||||
--- | --- | Totals: | 2294 | 1 |
3.2. Best Book Review
Selection and Assessment: Which of those book reviews do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.- I think that this book review is best than any other book reviews, because it written about my opinion.
- A lot of information which I got by this book are written in this book review.
4.0. BLOG LAYOUT, LABELING, LINKING, and MEDIA
Showcase | Yes | No |
4.1. Does your blog display an archive? | √ | |
4.1.1. Does the archive display the titles of posts? | √ | |
4.1.2. Is the archive organized by month? | √ | |
4.1.3. Is the archive at or near the top of the sidebar? | √ | |
4.2. Does your blog display a cloud or list of labels in the sidebar? | √ | |
4.2.1. Do your labels include these required labels (typed accurately): | --- | --- |
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4.2.2. Does your sidebar display other labels? | √ | |
| --- | --- |
Which labels, and to how many posts each? Please list those labels instead of www, xxx, yyy..., and list numbers of posts instead of n, m, o... (in parentheses), below. | --- | --- |
4.3. Links and media | --- | --- |
4.3.1. Do your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics? | √ | |
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| --- | --- |
4.3.2. Does your blog include posts with multiple links? | √ | |
| --- | --- |
4.3.3. Does your blog include other media? | √ | |
0 posts including other media | --- | --- |
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--- | --- |
4.4. Overall presentation
What have you done to enhance the overall presentation and readability of your blog? List and explain the three most important content, display, formatting, layout, or other presentation changes that you have made on your blog this semester.- Display. I listed a lot of photos to read by people.
- Formatting. I care that use many expression.
- Layout. I tried easy to see layout.
5.0. ADDITIONAL REFLECTIONS ON YOUR BLOG AND YOUR WRITING FOR IT
Please feel free to include reflections on both class work and homework, as well as on the content of this portfolio (proto-portfolios, showcases, selections, and reflections).- It was little difficult for me to do class work, so I often asked my friends what should I do on the time.
- I think that homework was little many for me. Writing class' homework use computer, so I need a lot of time. So, I felt so that.
- I think that this portfolio is very nice, because I can look over my document.
6.0. ADVICE AND SUGGESTIONS FOR YOURSELF, YOUR PEERS, AND YOUR SUCCESSORS
- To include some graphics is one of important thing.
- I think that people have to write this blog regularly, otherwise people will worry.
- I think that you should write a lot of things you did.
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Notes:
- This portfolio template derives from Writing Studio Blog templates for Writing IIIc and Writing IVc (2007-08), Writing III, §§1a & 1c, Writing IV: Portfolio, §§1a & 1c (2008-09), and the July 7, 2009, Portfolio for Writing III.
- Please use the same code in section 0.0 that you used to embed your proto-portfolios (PPFs) in the footer of your blog, which you should already have revised to display your 2nd (fall) semester PPF first.
- The essays section (1.0. Essays, above) derived from Proto-Portfolio 2-02 (2008).
- The essay selection and explanation item (§1.2, above) differs from that in the July 7, 2009, Portfolio for Writing III. Please read the new item carefully before making a selection.
License:
Please attribute to "the Writing Studio Blog, 2010.01.05" (with link, but without quotation marks).
1/01/2010
HAPPY NEW YEAR
How do you spend New Year’s days??
I went to my ground parent’s home greeting of New Year. My family and my cousin’s family gather my ground parent’s home every year. At there, we ate Osechi ryouri and Zouni (rice cake boiled with vegetables). I like Zouni very much. I like Osechi too.
Osechi has a lot of hope each dish. For example, Kazunoko (herring roe) is descendant prosperity. Konbu (kelp) is gratified. Ebi (shrimp) is longevity. The other dish has each wish. If you want to know about them, please look at this.
In this year, I want to challenge a lot of things. I want to get some qualifications so I will do my best.
Have a nice year!!! (173 words)
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